Rough Cut 2

After recent feedback from our peers, teacher, family and friends we have made relevant changes to the wellbeing of our grade and our film. Back At Ya now has been redrafted and the fonts have been changed, there are more scenes and clips to show our camera skills and the music has been edited to feature Walk This Way by MO. I believe our second rough cut has vastly improved our film opening and we will continue to redraft until we are happy with it and receive a majority of positive feedback.

This is the second rough cut of our film opening.

Feedback

1. The film needs a better production company title.

2. There is not enough dialogue in the film opening at the moment. 

3. The existing dialogue cannot be heard over the music in the film opening. When the main character shouts "Stop filming!" it is muffled and too quiet. Also when there Revenge video is being played the other character's "GET OUT LEAVE ME ALONE!" should also be louder.

By George Martin and Jack Jolly