Rough Cut 1

Feedback from teachers:

1. The Peacock Productions title is too basic, a more in-detail animated title would be better and more professional.

2. The piano backing track doesn't match the ideology of the film opening and creates a confusion when watching the film opening.

3. The titles and the font of the titles are in an incorrect order and don't match the theme of the film. The title font needs to be changed. IMPORTANT.

4. There needs to be some more sophisticated industry style shots which demonstrate a level of professionalism within creation of film.

5. Because of the title of the film the whole design of the film has to be relatable and targeted at a teenage audience, hence the removal of more adult themes needs to be done.

Feedback from target audience:

1. The protagonist of the film should be on screen for longer - her character needs to be built up more.

2. The style of titles doesn't really appeal to somebody my age - I think they should have a more solid design, as they look a bit too frilly to interest an audience of teenagers.

3. Change the music to a popular song, as this will make the opening more interesting and engaging. 

We will take all of these comments from various viewers into consideration and change what needs to be changed. We agree with the comments and understand that the rough cut needs re-working to become industry standard. We appreciate the main comment that the film opening is currently in-between a more teenager-esque and adult style film and We have chosen to revise the film so that it is more like 'Kidulthood' and aim the film at teenagers and base it around teenagers.

By George Martin and Jack Jolly